As a writer, we want our characters to come across as credible and believable. Internal thoughts are part of bringing our characters to life. So, what is the correct way to write what characters are thinking?
Reasons to Use Internal Dialogue:
- To make characters real to our readers.
- Show vulnerability – to help connect readers to the character.
- For dramatic effect – when you want to emphasize something important. Readers tend to remember emphasized moments.
- To show the character’s motivation.

Courtesy of Quick & Dirty Tips
Ways to Show Internal Dialogue
- Using the tag, “He thought.” I wish Stephen would leave well enough alone, she thought.
- Italics: Why can’t Stephen leave well enough alone? Italics are my favored method to show internal dialogue.
- Intermingling thoughts with narrative. Claire stared out the window. Why couldn’t Stephen be happy with the status quo? She didn’t have a clue what answer she’d give him this weekend.
- Using quotations – for the most part, is not recommended, even single quotations. Because quotations denote dialogue, it can confuse to the reader.
Do you find one method preferable over another? Why?
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I like using italics. It creates a difference between what was said aloud and thought internally. I sometimes use “s/he thought ” I’m definitely sharing this article with the budding writers in my circles.
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Thanks! Glad you found it helpful.
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I too prefer italics, but I don’t use this often as I was told that you can only share the thoughts of your main character? (written in third person). Great post though thanks. 😉
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I hadn’t heard that, thanks for sharing. I’m experimenting with blending thoughts into the narrative. Haven’t mad up my mind yet. Thanks for stopping by and commenting. I love to hear what others have to share.
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I could be wrong 😉
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I’ll do a little research and let you know.
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I like using italics or the she/he thought method. I don’t ever use quotations because I agree how that can be confusing for a reader.
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Thanks for commenting. I find that most of the writers I know, use Italics, but blending in with narrative also interest me. Glad you stopped by the Cow Pasture.
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